Denied PenBoyYohan's Original Staff Application (Fixed)

[PenBoyYohan]

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[wpo]

add a color scheme
add proof of ur previous experiences
bold the standard format, makes it easier to read

 

[PenBoyYohan]

add a color scheme
add proof of ur previous experiences
bold the standard format, makes it easier to read

Thanks for your feedback. I did change the bold to the standard format like you advised. However, in my application, I stated that I got a new pc so unfortunately I don't have proof of my experiences except for the one with AdeptMC. Also, I didn't chose to add a color scheme because it makes me feel cluttered.

 

[Sauds]

Neutral gl

 

[PenBoyYohan]

Neutral gl

Thanks for your reply!

 

[PenBoyYohan]

-1

- No proof of experience - I get that you 'reset your pc', but now your staff experiences are invalid
- If your brother has your old account, tell me the ign and I will say if you were staff on Adept & HCRealms as I played them both a lot.

TalibanPearl is what the IGN was at the time.

 

[PenBoyYohan]

TalibanPearl is what the IGN was at the time.

I wasn't at HCRealms as long, so I wouldn't be surprised if you haven't heard of me there. But, for Adept even after my staffing I was in a faction with you with Jackbarker07. Hopefully you will change your mind .
thanks for the feedback.

 

[PenBoyYohan]

Sorry for the misunderstanding. this application was first bugged, but has been fixed. refer to this for my application. I appreciate all feedback! <3

 

[Et43]

+1 A lot of detail, time and effort put into the app, good app overall
-1 lacking proof of experience.

 

[Horizon]

Application overall seems like rambling and very unorganized.

I’d suggest doing a read through and remove some un-needed details.

 

[williamm]

-1

 

[PenBoyYohan]

+1 A lot of detail, time and effort put into the app, good app overall
-1 lacking proof of experience.

thank you for your feedback!

 

[PenBoyYohan]

Application overall seems like rambling and very unorganized.

I’d suggest doing a read through and remove some un-needed details.

Alright, I'll look at it and I'll try to work with it. thanks for the help.

 

[PenBoyYohan]

Application overall seems like rambling and very unorganized.

I’d suggest doing a read through and remove some un-needed details.

I read through it and took out a lot of the rambling. Tell me what you think!

 

[Horizon]

I read through it and took out a lot of the rambling. Tell me what you think!

Overall, it has improved greatly. Still there are some places where it could be improved in my opinion, but that would require some organization and such which I don’t really want to spend time describing. What you have now should be just fine.

 

[PenBoyYohan]

Overall, it has improved greatly. Still there are some places where it could be improved in my opinion, but that would require some organization and such which I don’t really want to spend time describing. What you have now should be just fine.

alright, thanks for your feedback!

 

[shovel]

+1 The application has good points.
-1 The application is very unorganized.
-1 No proof of experience.

 

[steefsuperteef]

+0

 

[UrAmazing]

- 1

Lack of detail.

You are lacking a lot of detail. Detail is very
important because that's the way they will know
who you are and what you did in the past. You do not
know who they are and they do not know you. I do not think
they want to accept someone that hasn't told anything about
their past and who they are.

Lack of proof.

You are lacking a lot of proof, please provide more proof
of your experience as a staff member on other servers.
Proof is important because they cannot trust you with saying
something that may not even be true.

Very unorganized.

Please organize your application, when I saw it I didn't even
want to read it and straight up give you -1. This will help the
manager a lot as he doesn't need to look for the important
parts.

I wish you luck!

 

[PenBoyYohan]

- 1

Lack of detail.

You are lacking a lot of detail. Detail is very
important because that's the way they will know
who you are and what you did in the past. You do not
know who they are and they do not know you. I do not think
they want to accept someone that hasn't told anything about
their past and who they are.

Lack of proof.

You are lacking a lot of proof, please provide more proof
of your experience as a staff member on other servers.
Proof is important because they cannot trust you with saying
something that may not even be true.

Very unorganized.

Please organize your application, when I saw it I didn't even
want to read it and straight up give you -1. This will help the
manager a lot as he doesn't need to look for the important
parts.

I wish you luck!

I don’t know what you’re talking about with lack of detail tbh. I added a bunch of detail and actually, I do have a whole paragraph on talking about my traits and who I am as a person. Explain more in depth, please.